Need to Rewriting my essay (has correction in it) just need to fix the correctio

Need to Rewriting my essay (has correction in it) just need to fix the correction. 
the link is down below…
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1nH3SQTcganknLuGRIf7NnMQGka8q9zAoNdMQytHA6mI/edit?usp=sharing 
Also. fix the abstract. It’s too long!!! 
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1yLyHKnmWw0b3Kpx0SM8xRw6H57sUsCujrHRDENZI1xk/edit?usp=sharing
There are 27 comments (some of them are short like grammar and some are longer as u need to add a line and some are more complex bc u need to do more research to answer and others are just like concising the text for eg: ur abstract is too long)